25 Şubat 2010 Perşembe

A CHARMING PLACE (revised )

I like discovering new places. When I go to the different places, I feel myself like refreshing.I went to many cafes and none is as good as Çay Bahane.


The best place to go is Çay Bahane.When you see at first side you charm definetely.With big and magnificent door,it welcomes you.You feel as if you came a palace.Outside of it affects you.Harmony of many colors reflects beauty of inside.When you enter there you firstly see many authentic tables.A wide atmosphere relieve you.With a beautiful song and nice conversation, tih cafe is irrestible for you.There are some soft matresses sides of the table.If you don't want to sit on , these matresses are an alternative for you.Costs are not very cheap but this cafe deserves.The most popular drink is Çipçop which smells very beautiful and it tastes delicious,too. People wait for it but the wait is worth it.

Different places are oppotunities to learn new things.You feel happy but Çay Bahane is the best among them.You should go there if you go to İzmir.
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  1. Seda10 Mart 2010 11:38

    there is some grammatical mistakes,of course it must be :) it has an attractive body and introduction and conclusion are good.

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  2. seldabacak11 Mart 2010 23:25

    as seda saıd there are so grammatıcal mıstakes.but you made good descrıptıves.you are succesful.ee you are my friend :):)

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  3. özge11 Mart 2010 23:27

    hi afra:) there are few grammatcal mistakes, but I like body paragraph and conclusion. I think they are attractive.

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  4. Evrim Ertay11 Mart 2010 23:33

    afra, the organization is very good , but there are some grammatical mistakes and the content is attractive.

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  5. Adsız12 Mart 2010 07:12

    Bu yorum yazar tarafından silindi.

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  6. aysen eraslan12 Mart 2010 11:58

    Dear AFRA,
    your writimg good but it has some gramatical errors such as
    Outside of it effects you(affects)
    this matresses (these)
    It's most popular drink(its)
    ok see you:)

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  7. FERHAT AK3 Mayıs 2010 07:15

    As our other friends said there are some grammatical errors:)but I liked your essay and when I go to İzmir I wil precisely go there:)

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  8. büşraa19 Mayıs 2010 02:27

    hi afra,
    your essay is good and organization is satisfactory.but as everybody said some grammatical errors.For example,effets/affects it's popular drink/its popular drinks etc..ın spite of everything your desciption is good.see you :)

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